i was just wondering if you could help me by reading my learning story and letting me know if i have written it correctly please?
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Maleah's Bridge Adventure
Maleah today you became very excited when you saw the Balance beam and swinging wooden bridge in the playground, smiling widely you ran as fast as you could over to the balance beam and placed first your right foot onto the wide balance beam and then your left foot. You stared down at your feet with quiet determination as you concentrated on placeing one foot in front of the other While you held your arms out wide from your body to keep your balance as you asended to the top of ramp. Once you reached the end of the balance beam you grasped the hangles of the wooden bridge in both your hands you swung your body forward landing both of your feet firmly onto the moving wooden slates. You seemed very pleased with your acompishment Maleah smiling and laughing loudly as you jumped up and down rapidly on the bridge while you continued to hold tightly to railings with both hands. You continued to jump, rock and shake the wooden bridge with you whole body movements for a long time before you confidently climbed off the end of the wooden bridge using the single step one foot at a time.
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